I was wondering about the "obsidian shard". What happened to it? And how will you incorporate it within the story? Also, I noticed Dana's name changes from "Black" to "White".

The story has a good start.

pretty interesting. although there are a few peices missing:

wheres the exact story taking place?

why is she in the orphanage?

good storyline for now and if you learn the technology make it a youtube video

Interesting idea. I like your story so far. I bet Will and Dana are going to be hooked up. Anyways, I hope you update soon!

She cuts herself... grr... *hisses* I still don't agree with you on that part of the story. You didn't take into consideration my changes! *Pouts* What happened to that last funny line you were talking with me about? Huh? Huh? Huh?

Flames should be used to heat up hot chocolate.

It was a nice story.

I like this. It's cute, in that my-life-is-sad-but-wonderful kind of way, do you know?

Sorry, Idon't know what's gonna into me quite yet. Sorry. but I like this chapter. A lot. )

-Self-Diagnosed ADD

(expect more hyper reviews, but there will prolly be at least one more sad sounding one like this...sorry. D trying to be happy here..! )