|Reviews for Two Months|
| heal me forever chapter 1 . 11/18/2012
wow dat was KILLER kudos!
| InkWitch chapter 1 . 4/29/2011
why did it go from first person to third person and then back? edit this part: ""I'm losing my mind." She whispered to herself, Vincent grinned. She'd heard him after all, bracing himself, he sat up.
"Turn the light on will you? Or would you prefer it in the dark?" He was met with an almost uncomfortable silence, before the light was finally flicked on- he squinted, allowing his pupils to adjust to the sudden change.
"Vincent-" and there she stood. The one woman who drove him more mad than the Manson family. He frowned, when did she lose the air of haughtiness? Her eyes (which had dark circles beneath them, that weren't there before he left) regarded him with a trepidation that was just as new as the expression on her face. Her bottom lip almost seemed to tremble. What had happened to his Amazon warrior? There was something… overriding all of the new difference. Something- he'd never would have pinned until she spoke, she walked forward, as if afraid he was an apparition."
but i liked this oneshot a lot. :) it was cute, short and fluffy
| MelodieCC chapter 1 . 5/8/2010
I LOVE IT! it's so cute. i'm amazed that this is you're first one. wow! :)
| ghurl00 chapter 1 . 10/16/2009
hehe.:D cute and sweet and adorable. enjoyed reading it.:D
| I Murder on Impulse chapter 1 . 5/6/2009
| Sel chapter 1 . 1/16/2009
I love this
It's so well written
Yes the end is choppy, and I wish that I knew what happens next.
This would be a wonderful first chapter for a whole story.
I love how you named the parts, Her Present, and His Present.
For a second I thought present like gift, but I figured out it's time.
I love this, it's really, really good. I noticed only a little bit of typos, but even real authors have editors so whatever.
I wish you would continue this, even just to make it a two-shot or short story because the ending is a bit abrupt.
| PurpI3.14 chapter 1 . 11/24/2008
very fluffy yes but adorabubble for sure
well done _
| blurrylights chapter 1 . 11/3/2008
I absolutely loved this piece. The characters were great, and I loves the description throughout. Your stories are always a pleasure to read. Great work!
| kyrric.fictionpresspaperweight chapter 1 . 10/9/2008
You are a dirty liar.
A horrible, dirty liar.
Ha. I laugheth AT you.
It did NOT suck, nor was it short or choppy.
I envy your mad one-shot skills.
I can't write anything BUT one-shots.
And not even good ones at that.
Blargh. I hate you.
Yay for fluff. I love fluff. Vincent and Carina are awesomely awesome. Match made in hell, anyone? Dysfunctional relationships are my favourite kind. You should write more about them.
The idea of a one-shot is to write something that is more or less complete, but to leave the poor, unwitting fool that reads it clamouring for more. And you pulled it off beautifully.
One-shot plots are -relatively- simple and easy to follow, and they're very low commitment. Which is why I'm reading one-shots as opposed to starting on the REST of great big pile of literature that you've churned out. Yeesh. They're so LONG. I envy your ability to write brilliant long stories, with brilliant long chapters and exponential wordcounts. Mine aren't nearly so shiny. But I'm working on it, I swear.
Ha. More reviews equals more studying. Ha. I'm laughing at you more, can you tell? A devious ploy, but I SEE RIGHT THROUGH IT.
Regardless, I'm here reviewing for you. STUDY MORE, woman.
Uni is evil, I know. I spent a week there for work experience and kinda fell in love with it. Highschool is ridiculous.
Oh, and I forgot to mention before, with State of Irony, do you know how obvious it is that you're of the Down Under persuasion? 'cause you insist on using words like 'nanna' (there were others, but I can't remember them now) that are well, more atypical of Australia/NZ people. *waves flag* It was funny, actually. 'Cause I'm sitting there going 'What kind of American talks like this?' and then laughing alternately and in the wrong places. I'm weird, okay. Leave me alone. I told you I was part Grammar Nazi. BUT, I complaineth not. It's good, whatever you're doing. Keep doing it. I demand it.
I ALSO tried -am trying- to write a story set in the other hemisphere, and had to do lots and lots of research to work out the seasons and things and where they would be when.
I hate being a perfectionist sometimes.
And BACK to this story. It's cute, it's fluffy and adorably funny. Arrogance works on guys. In measured amounts, but still.
You should write a sequel to this, I'd love to know what happens with these two.
Okay, you're a distraction. *runs* I ned to go do more work. Blargh.
| kardula chapter 1 . 4/26/2008
hey, i liked it a lot! great one shot.
| PeterMoore chapter 1 . 4/4/2008
that was sweet.
| SparklingStar25 chapter 1 . 3/4/2008
This is awesome!
| wanara chapter 1 . 2/3/2008
i laughed soo hard. she is so abusive. he may not survive long.
It was really good and it made sense to me. the ending seemed to fit them.
| x3life chapter 1 . 1/3/2008
aww this was really cute! really enjoyed reading it. )
| sadisticprune chapter 1 . 12/9/2007
this is one helluve one shot. good job. haha. do a sequel.