Reviews for boys from newyork
girlthatsings chapter 1 . 5/24/2009
oh nedaboo, i'd review every work of yours, but then that's not necessary is it? cos we already did that :)


they are my favorite kind, the girls from chicago

named Neda.

(betcha can't guess who I is!)
kaylajac chapter 1 . 11/21/2007
I love this. at first it felt jumpy and disjointed but then the ending seemed to tie it neatly all together. I like the concrete images (like mapquest and turtle smilies).

the only concrit I have is, I'm not sure the 7th/8th lines really mesh, they're a bit too common and it feels like a filler rhyme.

otherwise, I love it. great flow and a unique subject. great writing.
Doxology chapter 1 . 11/2/2007
Wow. I really like this. It has so much feeling.

Peace and Love

~ H.P. Warble

PS probably going on my favorites.
catysue chapter 1 . 11/2/2007
this is so powerful and beautiful. i love the word choice and arrangement, it all flows very nicely. great work!