"while the person on my side begs to you answer questions?"

I believe it should be "begs you to answer questions"

*sighs* Some angst towards the end, a bit sad... How come the pills that are supposed to help him "focus" have the opposite effect on him? I'm a bit lost there...

Oh, that one was a shortie. :( Good thing there are three more! lol

Dr. Burgess is funny, but you still portrayed her as an adult and a professional. Good job so far.

On to chapter 7!

I forgot to mention, in the last chapter, towards the end you wrote "fasion" instead of "fashion". And here, in the beginning you write "Matthais" instead of "Matthias".

Somewhere (still towards the beginning) you write "comphrend" and I think the word is "comprehend".

Also when you say, "Erik Shafer was holding a crumpled bit of paper the therapist had thrown on the ground" Don't you mean "the" crumpled bit of paper?

Anyways, I love Dr. Burgess's character. I like the way the story is unfolding and I like that the humor is not the out in your face kind. It's subtle and clever. Can you feel the love?

Ok, can't stay, 4 more chapters to go!

Six chapters? Wow, it's like Christmas come early!

This chapter could have been boring, but somehow you managed to make it funny, interesting and important: the medical info (which by the way I found very amusing)not only help to understand "Mattie" (He gave him a nickname already!), but also kinda foreshadow how the story is going to unfold. I mean, "Incapacity to maintain relationships"? I'm intrigued!

Gotta go read chap. 5!

zomg.

insaneness.

You'd think they'd realise that if he's coherent and smart enough to avoid the drugs, giving him an incomplete dose would just screw him up and lead to weird(er) behaviour.

I do feel sorry for Erik, though.

hm.

They need some "getting to know you" time, yeses.

Anyhows. This is cool. I like this story, pleasew rite more so i can gush lots and build you a shrine. With gummy bears. ;)

Matthias! I love his name! *swoons*

Erik is so cute and out of his depth. He's going to do so WELL here *ahem.*

Burgess, though... hurm. Much as i am loathe to subscribe to the "nurses must alwasy be friendly and bright and cheerful" side of things... she seems... foreboding p

As in, its something more than just general job related stress and issues.

oher.

we shall see, yes?

*turns the page*

Three chapters in a ROW!

My email updates made my day. Seriously. I'm no longer contemplating blowing up my work.

Well, okay... this will ward it off for a /while/.

*grins*

I love mental hospital stories. So many opportunities for truly bizarre and lovable characters. I'm looking forward to more!

and hey, E.A. Poe, indeed.

They're completely incoherent patient spouting classic literature at them. Fantastic.

Am I the first one to review? Great!

Great first chapters... Great setting, great writing.

I was a little confused at the beginning of Chapter 3 as to who the "he" was...but when you said Matthias, I figured out that this was the "mentally ill" one.

"he liked the theory behind medicine and not the experience." Great line. I think this applies to all areas of study...!

Great how you managed to sketch the characters' personalities through the narrative and without spelling it out... For instance, Matthias is clever. How do we know this, because you said so? No, because you can see that through his diary entries and his perspective in chapter 3. Kudos for that.

It's all great so far! I'm loving it and I'll be eagerly awaiting the next chapters.

Cheers!

Falconer.