Reviews for what moves you
smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 11/6/2007
I like this. It's very well written. The details work well with your point. Good job at conveying the emotion. You did an excellent job at that. I think that it was very unique, original. Good work. )
Amadea chapter 1 . 11/5/2007
the first line is very profound, stretching the metaphor of liquid movements into liquid that you can drink, or drown in. I also liked the line "you swallow the vowels and words you never told her." keeping the theme of a liquid, something like words being swallowed. I love it, you're very talented. If you have any suggestions for my recent poems, i'd love to hear your opinion!