"thought that it was gonna last,

maybe for an eternity.

But you know what?

It didn’t."

hit me. hehe! love it! Great poem!

"Even though I say I don’t care,

It doesn’t mean that my heart isn’t breaking.

Breaking into a million,

maybe a gazillion

pieces."

So true. I like how honest this poem is. Great job!

Damn, hurting huh? I like it.

I like the questions. They work very well and the structure is interesting. Nice job

Best Wishes

Holli x

hihi...yep...you read this to me over the phone but really its 10 times better when you read it yourself. I absolutely love it...ahh...it somewhat describes some stupid people i fell for and things that happened. anyways...i know im not supposed to review to ramble about my life...so...

lovelovelovelovelove it!

(and i cant wait til summer!)

haha

HEY!

Its Hali (from HTR) and...mz-turner (from

...just wanted to make that clear. lol.

Anyways I started using fictionpress for poetry too lately. I think this poem is great! I'm really getting into poetry of all sorts and I plan on learning more about it and how properly to write it when I get some free time but anyways. This truly does read wonderfully.

"But not all fairytales have happy endings, and you wanna know why? Cause the knight doesn’t always have shining armor,and the pretty princess might not be so pretty after all."

I love that! Not only does it flow nicely but its also the story of my life put more eloquently. This is really good stuff. You should write more soon!