Reviews for The Ideal Man
Romiette-Misfit33 chapter 11 . 6/19/2014
Great story, are you going to continue to write this story.
BleedingInLove chapter 2 . 10/6/2013
okay start :)
Myrtho chapter 11 . 5/28/2013
if this is the end i don't think so. please upgrade we need to know much about the relationship if the mom and Devon will be ok with their relationship. please upgrade
Myrtho chapter 11 . 5/22/2013
where is the rest of the story please we want the finish on your story it is very interresting
empress11690 chapter 11 . 1/23/2012
WOW! This was sooo good! omg! Its new and a fresh take on something I've felt I've read overa and over again! I can NOT wait to see what you come up with next! please update soon... ...or I'll find you.(j/k) just kidding...really.(evilglare)
ChemicalHazzard chapter 2 . 3/15/2011
One thing that I noticed about your story, and what stopped me from getting past the 2nd chapter is that you go over EVERY detail. Like you describe everything they're doing to the extreme, which in some cases makes for good description, but at points you're literally making a list of their actions.

I can tell you, a reader could car less about which hand Tray was holding his toothbrush in. Putting in so much detail prevents the stroy from moving at a pace where someone could stay interested, it's pretty monotonous at times. And I'm sorry if it sounds like i'm being rude, i'm just trying to help you improve your writing skills.
Fraink chapter 11 . 3/6/2011
Will you be posting anytime soon? :]

I would very much appreciate it :]
shackled to the planet chapter 1 . 2/12/2011
I read until the last chapter even though I'm reviewing in Ch.1 but I like the story. The Rocker and the Lawyer. Intresting combination, usually Lawyers are with domestic type dudes. Plus that this couple is black and white too. Keep writing please.
ChemicalHazzard chapter 1 . 2/6/2011
I tried my best to read this, really I did.

But you fluctuated from past tense to present way too often, and the way you write seems quite stop and start. There's no better way for me to put it. Storyline sounds alright but not everyone can be a Stephanie Meyer and run a book on plot only.

I also noticed little mistakes like "where" and "were", these things pull people out of the story because it doesn't flow.

I suggest revision becuase it does seem like it has promise
Alixermixer chapter 11 . 12/5/2010
It's sad about how the people closest to them are acting but I hope that they are able to get through it.
mekaky chapter 11 . 9/6/2010
GrownFLgurl chapter 11 . 8/24/2010
Thanks for the update.
starlitwisher chapter 10 . 8/15/2010
I like Lilly.
IndianPrincess chapter 11 . 8/14/2010
Great update and welcome back missed this story. I'm glad her mom is gone back home too and that Tray told her about his crazy family as well looking forward to the next update thanks have a great day!
biomed08 chapter 11 . 8/13/2010
GREAT GREAT UPDATE! I'm so glad tray went to go see Aleen and told off Devon. Either Devon needs to get his act together or Tray needs to dump him. I'm also glad that didn't ruin the relationship between ALeen and Tray because its still sort of new but you can tell they really care for each other. cant wait for the next update!
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