Reviews for Smoke and Water
fairytale failure chapter 1 . 12/24/2007
Amazing. Playing with hearts is a dangerous game..it's so easy to hurt someone.

In the first stanza, I loved the simile of a girl like smoke, and how you elaborated on it in lines 2-5, especially how you said 'only to find that she'd slipped through'.

'as he seduced notes from the keys' is very original, one of my favourite lines.

In the third stanza, another great use of poetic device..the metaphor was really well done. The last two lines in this stanza, put together with the line after them, is extremely powerful.

I didn't like the ending very much compared to the rest of the poem; you brought in the element of water, which connects to the title but not to any other part of the poem.
Masked Soul chapter 1 . 11/26/2007
i really liked this especially the first and third stanzas, "but leaving a scent to strike a chord on the senses" my favorite part of this well done
windy girl chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
Ah, I am so loving that first line. :] (The rest was lovely, as well.)

-pb
she smolders chapter 1 . 11/14/2007
We're all just fickle creatures at heart, when you get down to it. This just amazing.