Reviews for nonchalance
simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 2/14/2008
I like the middle a lot.. its a really powerful image.. Im not a big fan of the second and second to last line.. the phrase "fake jolly" seems odd and sort of like its just there to rhyme with melancholy... other than that I really liked the piece a lot

Thanks for your review... definitely picked an old piece to review.. lol... I think my newer stuff is a lot better if you wanna check it out
poemkitten7 chapter 1 . 12/6/2007
I like the rhythm and your word choice. Very original. Keep up the good work! :) -Sara
Moondog Dozier chapter 1 . 12/2/2007
Excellent sound and progression. The repetition works well to frame the flow. Song-like. Very audible. Good work. MD:77.