nice the way you repeat(kind of) stanza at the end to represent a cycle...if that's what you intended, I could just be spouting rubbish

cool ending lines, but I think it would be more effective if the punctuation instead of ! was just a period. or a ? by itself would be interesting...

it's a great idea and the rhyme and meter helps build up the idea of a cycle as well. and, have i missed anything...oh yeah. i could be wrong, but isn't "triskaidekaphobia" a fear of friday the thirteenth? (_)

lol. The things that spawn from a Geology class. Interesting.

This is really cool. From the summary I expected it to be a simplistic nature poem, but this is a strong piece of writing. I like the format, and the wording is very effective. I also like how you ended it - it's different and unique and makes the reader think. Good job with the extended metaphor.