|Reviews for Without a doubt|
| pfeiffer chapter 22 . 3/27/2008
Damn! The wait was so justified by the tofutti scene by Ciaran... It was so HOT! don't let him near anything than can be licked and sucked... well except on Adam of course... hahahaha...
I'm so looking forward when he goes home... not that I want him to face Rob and get beaten again - but I think I would want to know how he fends off Rob this time... and please bear in mind what we readers wanted - for Rob to suffer a rather painful demise...
| Exia chapter 22 . 3/27/2008
NO I don't want him to go home you make me a sad panda but the make out scene was cool...So many in the room hehe
Love you as always
| Kitty chapter 21 . 3/25/2008
Aw. That's shitty. (
I wish people would listen.
| xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx chapter 21 . 3/24/2008
i just read the whole thing in one go. it took me... around 8 hours lol. and i ate all three meals today in front of the computer reading it.
anyway, please, please update soon, i really love this story, and you are a talented writer :)
| hpfreakout chapter 21 . 3/22/2008
So, this story is amazing and kind of makes my life. I ADORE it. I cannot wait to find out what happens next. Please please please write more soon!
| Die In A Hole With Penguins chapter 21 . 3/21/2008
Please Update I Need Top Find Out What Happens This Is A Uber Good Story!
| Sierra chapter 21 . 3/14/2008
XP hurry up and update lol.
| Stormy Whether chapter 20 . 3/8/2008
I forgot to ask in my sleepy-ness... What's W-A-D?
| Stormy Whether chapter 21 . 3/8/2008
I just spent the last... like five hours reading this off and on with judo practice in between (I can totally sympathize with Ciaran on those bruises after that...). Interesting enough story. I love how you have the relationship between Adam and Ciaran. It's like a butterfly's wing. The relationship is strong enough to keep it afloat, but tender enough to brake with too much force. It's very realistic, and I definitely commend you on making it so.
It's been interesting reading through and looking through all the errors. I love how when you look through a writing you can see how a person grows as a writer. That's a compliment, FYI. Anyway, you've definitely improved a mega-ton since the beginning of this thing, but there are still errors. Look back over your sentence structure, make sure that you are using commas! There are tons of places that don't make sense because of your lack of commas. I'm too tired to find any examples at the moment, but just be careful of them. Also, I can't quite seem to remember if you still do this, but be careful of run-on sentences. I noted a few places in previous chapters where you kept using run-ons. Something else to be aware of. Also, stray away from cliché - I was reared on fanfiction,net where every other slash story has a game of spin the bottle/ truth or dare. I've seen the celtic knot necklace multiple times too (but I still find it a 100% adorable touch to any story anywhere).
So what you might want to do is look for a beta. Normally I'd offer but I have two extracurriculars that take up three hours of my time every day, plus homework and personal projects. It's a miracle I don't get to sleep past midnight every night. Needless to say at this point, that I can't handle anymore, but there is a lovely tab for beta readers at the top navigation of the page. If you don't want to have a beta, read through the chapters more than once before you post them. It's best if you read them slowly out loud once, and then read it over just for punctuation and grammar.
I absolutely adore this story and trust me, the criticism isn't special treatment - I do this for everyone whether they want it or not (kinda like rape... But for writing... See? This is when we know how much sleep I have... or rather haven't gotten). I adore your story and I definitely can't wait to read more!
| Exia chapter 21 . 3/6/2008
Aw I loved that scene between K and A, made me go all mushy I wish I had someone...But you cheer me up with your story which I love like um Fluffy Ducks!
Keep it real
| Sierra chapter 21 . 3/6/2008
| yayawhynot89 chapter 21 . 3/5/2008
Meanie :P how could you leave us hanging like that? I can't wait for the next chapter :D good job by the way
| pfeiffer chapter 21 . 3/5/2008
WOW! the boys were fighting and Ciaran took the punch... OUCH! the poor boy needs love and cuddles not another bruise! I feel so sorry for him...
Anywho... so when is Balke showing up and what kind of trouble would he bring?
OH... the ring thing was cute... but I must say Evan steals the show when Christian and him kissed... hehehehe... Don't you just love Evan?
| insanityxspeaks chapter 3 . 3/2/2008
This is fantastic, I just found it today, so I've only read through the first three chapters, but I defintely plan on sitting down and reading this whole thing, I love it so far
| yayawhynot89 chapter 20 . 2/23/2008
I LOVE this fic. I just stumbled upon it today :) anyways i really can't wait to find out what guy Adam has been talking to on the phone i can't get that off my mind! lol more please?:D