hey i was reading yur story and i juss has to comment. yu are a very good writer. i had left of at this chapter, chapter nineteen and juss wanted to say tht you write ... with intersting detail lol. yu really gave an image whn i read this. its great so far. i still have 20 and 21 left to read. juss really felt i needed to review on chapter 19. good job with the story so far!

Hi.

Yeah. So. I adore this story. I just started reading it this morning. Please update soon. Please, please, please!

wow we had his cake and some too hahaha, i cant wait for the update this was an awechapter up date soon XD

I absolutely love your story!it gives me chills (the good kind) when I read it lol. Please update soon! :) Great job!

More, more, more! :)

That was beautifully written!

I fall in love with Age more every chapter lol.

That was honestly perfect though, they're so cute.

Btw, jw, how big is Leira? I feel like she makes herself out to be some elephant... and I realy don't think she is

Steamy indeed ;)

One of my favorite chapters. What I love about this story is how their relationship progresses naturally... )

Nice, LONG, hot chapter :)

Definitely one of m favourites!

I love this story. I like how Age and Leira's relationship seem to naturally progress. I can't wait to see what happens next between these two. It appears that they're in the honeymoon phase of the relationship, so there should be trouble ahead.

I think I like Leira as a character because you do a very good job of writing her insecurities, making her more real. She is insecure about things that women her age tends to be insecure about. I have a feeling her insecurities will pose problems for her relationship with Age.

It's nice to see how Age has able to adapt himself to the dynamic between Leira and Jay. I love their friendship and its good to see Age fitting right in. Jay seems like a fun character and he brings a lot of humor to the story.

Steamy? I'd call this boiling hot! Wow!

steamy indeed. ;)

They are so adorable. And Age is such a sweet guy. I'm seriously enjoying your story and I hope you'll update really soon.

And oh, there's something bothering me about this chapter... the questions in the conversations. You're using comma to end the sentence instead of question marks. It's no big deal, but it confuses me sometimes. So, I hope you could work on that on the next chapter. :)

I like the way you handled this chapter with their relationship. Jay's comment at then end struck me as ass-hole-ish and insensitive especially since he should know how uncertain Liera is of herself and her lack of self confidence about being "worthy" of dating Age.

Please please don't do what so many writers would do and have some dramatic breakup and then bring them back together again! Not to tell you how to write your story, but that kind of plot line drives me nuts! I'd rather see how you can work out Liera's insecurities about her appearance with Age's love and help supporting her and helping her realize that she IS a great person and deserves happiness and love as much as anyone else. I could even see her battling with her weight while trying to hide it from Age until he figures it out and reaffirms his love of her for who she is, just the way she is. :)

I don't ever do this, but if you'd like someone to read through the story for typos and miscellaneous grammar, let me know in a note and I can email you or something. :)

I love, love this chapter! Hope you update soon! :D

haha i love jay hes so funny... oh why must leira doubt how much age is head over heels for her? loved this chapter cant wait for the update XD