So beautifully descriptive and I loved how you gave objects personalities.

-Sapphire

Oh, by the by, I have edited all chapters and put a new one up on my story "Persephone." Check it out please?

This is really beautifully written. You have a great grasp on descriptive language.

There just something made a huge weight life off my shoulders. I don't know what I mean by that last remarke but I fill lighter and like I could fly. Wow is all I can say right now cause that was a beautiful poem, it really is something special to read. Amazing work.

I love this. It was really well written. If you would like to get rid of the double spacing format, press "shift" and "enter" at the same time when typing the document. If you don't care if your work is double spaced, ignore this advice. Great poem, though. A rather cliched analogy but I think you gave it a fresh, new view point. Good work. Keep writing. )