Reviews for telltail
Ondine's Curse chapter 1 . 3/12/2010
the last stanza is unforgettable.
tonight we bloom chapter 1 . 2/16/2010
Kate Marshall chapter 1 . 2/5/2010
Your poem's rhythm I love. It's odd - not flowing or smooth, but variant and irregular and creative. I liked your rhymes and the line breaks (particularly "tick / tock" because the emphasis was just sublime).

"seconds slip past your temples" Divine. Time being something tangible like that - you're genius.

"we wring ourselves out and wait." I like that. Really do.

An interesting poem. Thank you for sharing!

windy girl chapter 1 . 12/17/2009
wow, wow, wow. i LOVE this. it's perfect.
Tytherpol chapter 1 . 12/1/2007
god this is perfect. holy wow.

i was first impressed most with your rhythm and the way this piece accelerates and slows through your word choice.

and the meanings in your line breaks are so awesome.

the closure of this poem solidified the meaning of it

oh! and the birds. omg how did you slip that in there.

i adore the meanings of the birds for the cats and how you tie their thought back in to the 3rd stanza too.

this is the best poem i have read in a very,very,very,very x10 long time.

i hate giving just praise, but i can't think of anything i would change.