|Reviews for The Girl Next Door|
| usuallystruck chapter 1 . 5/5/2008
that was pretty good, but if a prince came up to you (in those days), wouldn't you marry him anyway?
also more detail would be nice
and i like how you had that it fit both her and her next door neighbor
| drew chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
that was a funny ending! good work.. but try harder next time and try to put your feelings and emotions in the next one.
| l3g3nd chapter 1 . 11/18/2007
Well to be frank your 1st paragraph has already catches my attention. I am drawn into your story.
As I proceed, it is getting more and more interesting; lol especially the dashes along with lines 'but uncomfortable'. It makes me laugh.
The conversation between the prince and Cinderella is sharp, and well-refined. Lol, the two things Cinderella would like to make it clear, and also the neighbor thing. Haha
Anything, it's a fine piece of writing. Congratulation and this story is really worth for a 93 mark. Hehe.
Happy writing anyway.
| Artemis Anderson chapter 1 . 11/17/2007
Wow, that IS an interesting twist! o.O Wasn't expecting the whole "You might wanna try my neighbor, though; I'm pretty sure she was there" d:P
And I love the song that your penname is modeled (?) after d:P