Reviews for oxygen
the pencil days chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
I've read this before, but I'll say this again.

"i can't stand you but

you're the very air

i breathe"

Those lines are pure verbal magic. I actually adore them, it's a wonderful concept you've given there. I'm gonna have to steal them from you at some point... xD;

Forgive me, eternity [if I may call you that for short], if I'm misrepresenting your writing, but here's what I have to say to the previous reviewer:

I don't want this to seem like I'm attacking you for having a slightly negative opinion of this piece, but what you picked up on, its blurriness and smudging, is exactly what was intended by the author. The point of the poetry is to be borderline incoherent, similar to the author breaking down... 's like.. the author can barely follow her OWN thoughts.


But I personally think it's brilliant, love. -hugs- Lovely work.
sylvia's syndrome chapter 1 . 11/19/2007
I enjoyed this piece, but I think it would have been far more enjoyable if there had been more punctuation. Instead of flowing nicely, I found that this piece just got all blurred and smeared nearly to the point of incoherence. It was somewhat frustrating to have to continually retrace the author’s thoughts.