First off I want to thank you for writing this amazing story! There is just this something that -I don't know makes it stand out as different and not the usual soppy romance you get everyday. I loved how in the beginning Nora's thoughts came out as morbid and even the routine that she followed everyday accentuated it. Each chapter you had something new happening and for me that's a good thing! I hate when nothing happens after a few chapters :D There was really nothing that I could find wrong with this story. The only thing that personally bothered me was the relationship between Nora and Wes suddenly springing up at the end of the story. I had really hoped that- I don't know- they have more personal interactions that lead up to something bigger? I'm not sure if the whole staying with Pia was it or not? But anyway I'm glad Nora got a bit of hope at the end of the story to get away from her father. That man was just the end of me and I wanted to kill him so many times :P
Again this was a great read and I wish you best of luck for your other work as well!

she seemed like a selfish .
but i understand, why should she care when nobody cares about her?part reality part teenage angst.

Nor is such an excellent example of how all stories on Fictionpress should try and impress a message on the readers. Nor, for me at least, show how important it is to not only involve yourself in the community but also how people should seek justice and equality even if the odds are against them. I love the main character and how she thinks and sees things. She is always questioning everything and is very curious, so much so that she almost reminds me of a child who is just starting to realize that there is more to the world than your house and school. Such a great read!

Hi.

I just thought I'd let you know, I loved this story. It really was amazing (plot-wise).

The only thing I really noticed (off the top of my head) was a little timing issue. I felt that you may have rushed through certain parts where there should have been more detail. For example, Nora's relationship with Glenn. It would have been nice if you included a few more scenes between them or a rising tension that hints at a breakup.

Also with her relationship with Wes, it might be nice if the starting point of their romantic relationship was more clearly defined.

Also, was the donation she made after her conversation the only one or were there more? Before Wes asked her about her donations resulting in the guns, was there any thoughts of her own about it?

The years really seemed to speed by. I know you seemed to mark them by the visit to the grave, and once by shopping but it might be nice if you gave another type of symbol as well.

I really did love this story. :)

i definitely like your ending. it's extremely different. none of the usual soppy kiss scene or wedding scene or birth scene or kids-running-around scene. it's soppy, but it's very real and close to her heart. her mother's death. very poignant ending, methinks. hmm feedback... im not sure i have feedback per se. more of my general views.

i can't say i agree with what she's been doing. she's been doing what she deems right. truning her dad on melissa (or whatever her dad's gf's name is)? it's a whole bunch of lies. a lot of them. she's been lying to her dad the whole time, and now melissa's getting kicked out. now, i cant say melissa didn't betray him in any way. maybe she was a watcher from the start. but she seemed very nice to her the whole time. of course, i could be misreading the whole thing (or almost all of it) cos i find all the issues and events very complex and slightly hard to keep up with. im a bit slow like that. but it seems to me that though your protagonist does a lot of self-discovery in this book, she doesn't seem to have the usual set of morals that society deems ideal. not that im complaining. just stating my impression. feel free to correct me if im wrong, cos i dont understand people all that well and often wait to see if the author corrects me. ive enjoyed this story loads :)

hahahaha omg this is so hilarious. trust her to pick up on him thinking she's like the women in sex and the city rather than that he wanted to understand her better in the first place. silly girl.

i love how you've included a lot of issues in this book. self-discovery, thoughts about the social structure etc. i can see this as a book that someone would want to publish. probably under the teen fiction genre. i can see me taking it off a shelf at the library xD

awww poor nora. when my uncle passed away, my mum he'd want us to think of his funeral as a celebration because he'd accepted the Lord, Jesus Christ, and he was going to heaven. so i said we ought to have balloons then. and she wholeheartedly agreed. but in the end i didnt pursue the matter cos there'd be a lot of non-Christians at the funeral and i knew they wouldnt understand.

ohman. so touching. i like that she has this entire plan for her mother's deathday and each thing she does has some significance to her mum. it's very sweet. i also like how she sounds very matter-of-fact through it rather than emotional, like her mum is dead but she can commemorate her spirit and that's how she copes with her death.

hellooooo fellow singaporean! even though you're technically a malaysian, unless you've switched citizenship, we live in the same country! xD this story looks good so far. good english. yay! i hate it when i have to mentally keep correcting an author's grammar. and i like your narrator's inner thoughts. your choice of words is very poetic.

i play the violin :)

I really enjoyed this story,

I want my own Wes :(

Haha

I loved this story. It seemed a bit melodramatic while I was reading it but I assumed thats how you wanted it to be. The ending seemed kinda rushed (maybe?) or incomplete somehow. Are you planning a sequel?

I guess I should have taken the time to review a few times before this, but I didn't. I'm too lazy! Anywho. I really enjoyed this story. It really grabbed me and pulled me along. I dunno, it was just good. And of course I'm a sucker for a happy ending! Toodles!

I haven't read very much, only to chapter 17, but I think it's really good, but please add more Nora-Wes tension. they re so romantic together.