how delightful for them! I've been waiting, hoping for this, for quite some time. thank yuou for the lovely update, and please do keep writing.

wow, intense chapter! it's amazing to see how different these two girls are.

Another nice chapter. I like that Alex didn't change completely just because he fell in love, but he's also not in complete denial. And you're just such a good writer! Please update soon.

I love mins point of view! she's so different and I love learning about her "culture" so to speak, like how they reproduce and all the wonderful little details that have started to come together.

Hm... I feel like I've already reviewed this but it says I haven't, so here I go!

I love how different delora and caia are... caia seems really in control; it's interesting.

Min's point of view is so interesting, because it's so different from what I'd expect. You do that very well.

Oh my! Are they both dead, or only Delora, I wonder? Nice chapter. Vignette. Whatever one ought to call it.

This is so... fascinating. It's like, you've created this entire world, but more than that, a feeling. I don't know what it is, but it's, um... otherworldly? Anyway, I really like this.

I love the description of the fault line, the crack. that was so well done, seriously. I love the two of them :( amazing build up to the end in this chapter.

oh my gosh, she is so freaky. I can't believe she scattered the butterfly god :( I mean, I knew already, but that is so scary.

:( this is so sad! I wish the butterfly god didnt have to be scattered.

I like that he cant understand min. sometimes I forget that min doesn't speak, since caia seems to be able to understand her well enough.

things should get interesting from here on out, hm?

very intense chapter! you asked me before what I'd like to see more of, and I forgot to reply, but these two are what I'd like to see more of. I guess my wish came true? it wasnt exactly romantic, but it was very "them".

fave part:

[It does hurt. It hurts more than she can describe it but… it is not worse than the blade that sliced through her palm. It is not worse than watching her home burn to the ground. It is not worse than standing behind Alex in the middle of another smoked out village of his childhood memories and being unable to comfort him.]

this part is just... I dont know. it speaks to me.

Hey girl! It's been awhile, hasn't it?

I think you would really like the works of Anne Bishop. She's a great author, one of my favorites, and you remind me of her.

~Lyn

at first I forgot that past tense indicated things that happened in the past, but I caught back on and this made more sense. so it's nice to see what she went through; gives us more perspective on her character as well as the background.

this was very sad! I do really hope that they get happy endings, even though things aren't exactly looking up.

ta.

The first sentence of this chapter is a bit repetitive. No need to tell us that she's shivering as she's shuddering; we already know that.

On a somewhat irrelevant note: I do keep up with this story and am enjoying it well enough, but the chapters are so short and the flow so disjointed (though I know that's supposed to be a defining characteristic of it, and I don't necessarily have a problem with it) that I usually just don't have anything constructive to say, good or bad. I certainly look forward to reading this when it's a cohesive story, though, if you ever do plan on making this into one.