Reviews for the only pieces of you that's left
relapse into change chapter 1 . 11/30/2007
i liked this

it's beautiful

and my favorite were the last two lines and third stanza :)
creepy kiss on tuesday chapter 1 . 11/22/2007
im amazed you didnt get a million reviews for this, it is fantastic. i love the thing with the parentheses and the overall poem is phenomenal. favorites!
shadow-of-a-trackless-sea chapter 1 . 11/22/2007
seems to be you're adding to your creepy selection too, lol. Well this lately has been a popular theme for many authors but I think you did a better job than most. I could actually picture things happening to the boy and his friends. However, I know that it's your style but I still must critize. I was somewhat confused by your parenthesis. Some of the words made sense but other made it a little more confusing because the word didn't "complete" that stanza's thought. For example "in his friends' mind (heart)" That was one of the most bothersome to me. But you still got your point of the story and a message across, so good job.