|Reviews for Upon a Star|
| Geraldine Aubergine chapter 1 . 4/23/2012
Really great descriptions. I love the idea and the symbolism of wishing on a black hole. Loses its pacing a little in the middle but the imagery is so strong it doesn't really matter. :D
| Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 8/16/2009
"Sinking through the twilight sky,
Lost within its very own soul." -I like how you characterize the star making it seem kind of lost and hopeless.
"I wish I die with no regrets," -A wonderful wish!
I like the rhyme scheme in this. Nicely done!
| Kenna-Kat11 chapter 1 . 5/4/2008
that was absolutely amazing
i loved it
and it was so powerful and beautiful
one of the best poems i have ever read
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 12/16/2007
I really love this.. the rhyming is great and the whole piece is very sweet... the ending is great and unexpected
| CrazyTurtles chapter 1 . 12/11/2007
Beautifly sad. I love the last few lines, especially the one about ashes falling upon the stars. Beautiful.
| sourgummyworms2007 chapter 1 . 12/7/2007
spur of the moment is the best type of poem to me. thats how my poems are. neway. me like.
| MoonlitMaiden chapter 1 . 11/26/2007
There is something beautiful about this poem and yet underneath it seems so dark. I'm not sure, this is what I got from the poem.
I love your format, great rhyming, too.
Hope to read some of your other works,
| shazzzzzzz chapter 1 . 11/25/2007
that was beautiful
my ashes fall upon the stars
make my life halfheartedly great
i love you
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 11/24/2007
:) GREAT poem. So glad you posted! *clap clap clap*. Write on!
| IrrevocableLove chapter 1 . 11/24/2007
I liked it. It's got a bit of a depressed undertone though. Is there a reason for that?
| smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 11/24/2007
I thought this was beautiful...Your last stanza (the line about the ashes) actually reminded me of my poem (broken is beautiful)...But I truly loved this. It was very well written. Good work. Keep writing. )
| Kenshinswife chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
This was beautiful foo, one of my favorites so far. It rhymed perfectly and filled me with hope, but but sad in the end because it seemed like your wish wasn't fulfilled. I especially love the first part,
I wished upon a star tonight,
A black one with an empty hole,
Sinking through the twilight sky,
Lost within its very own soul.
I just love how you write.
| fuzbrat chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
I like this one, not really sure what reason but it's nice. i know this might sound a little lame but I'm still suffering from turkey coma lol. Keep up the good work
| Tekla chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
you always have such a way with words! I love it. )
Keep up the good work!
| mate.feed.kill.repeat chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
It's so tragically beautifully simply. Very admirable work. I think I fell in love with it. ] Favorites list, I believe.