Reviews for tonight at the playground
punctured.lungs chapter 2 . 6/12/2011
"She says perfection will never fit her right." I love that line.
steffxnie chapter 1 . 5/19/2010
'we're flying and letting our fingers ache, the flash of shooting stars behind our snowy eyelids is excruciating & we're laughing, we can't breathe.'

favorite stanza.

i like your writing. please write more! :)
Little girl Big world chapter 1 . 9/27/2009
This is amazing. I love the descriptions and saying what happens at different places on the playground. The ending was great.
wishesDON'TcomeTRUE chapter 2 . 5/4/2009
Beautiful. Just beautiful.

Process-Of-Dying chapter 1 . 1/2/2009
I've spent many nights at playgrounds with close friends wasting life and trying to imagine a somewhat bright future, and speaking of unrequited love
Indigo Carmine chapter 1 . 3/26/2008
I really, really dig this. Your word choice is great. The title is perfect.
riotmaker chapter 1 . 1/13/2008
just fucking gorgeous . you honestly left me breathless .
dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 11/28/2007
love love love. yes.
Masked Soul chapter 1 . 11/26/2007
This is really nice, i can actually picture something like this kinda like dream like though and more of nymph like girls than modern day every day people, great job
Faith Adeline chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
great poem. I love the diction and the imagery of the poem. I cannot wait for more. Keep it up.
smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 11/23/2007
this was interesting. a little scary and a little sad. you seemed to have a good grip on figurative language here, though. that's good. so yeah, this poem was nice. i liked it. )