This was so catchy and edgy and perfect, and the lines like "we can pour our slanted feelings/ off the pier into the bay" and "we can ask the air to give birth again" are so uniquely beautiful. There is a perfect balance in the language of this poem. I love it :)

lthough i did not see a lot of detail I was able to imagine things and see the scences play out before my eyes, which poems are to do. So nice work.