Reviews for World
deefective chapter 1 . 8/5/2009
Well, I do like the sing-songy quality of this piece. It has the tone and flow of being wistful sort of and it reads nicely out loud. I'm not so sure about the fragmented sentences though. I don't think you should've broken them up like that but instead put one whole sentence in each line. I think that would've made more of an impact and it would've helped to read this better. But other than that, nicely done.
Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 11/27/2007
This is great. Very, very well done. Write on!

Anna _
XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 11/27/2007
This is really good. I like the messege. Also it might make a better poem. But good work.. Keep it up!

Kristie Marie
Dreaming Chica chapter 1 . 11/26/2007
I love this song! it is so well written! it had lyrics full of meaning nad it flows so well! the context of the song was amazing! good job!

Dreaming Chica