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did you know that (in the first few chapters) you use the words 'holy hell' quite a bit? i dont mean that in a bad way...i just mean that you use it often. i found it funny after a while - and it kinda added to ashlyn's character D

loved the story, it was awesome. i think i'm in love with parker too )

This was an awesome start. Ash is hilarious,and I'm curious to see who the arm belongs to...lol. Great job! :)

Aww i wish this story was longer! D

YAY!

AWESOME! Hehehehe!

Hehehehehe!

hey! I loved this story, it was freaking awesome indeed! i just added you on live journal, because of course I want to read the smut or chapter seventeen you have up there! I'm AngelicWriter22.

Hi! Your story was awesome! I'm interested in reading the version up on livejournal though. My username is: tennis_summer. Keep up the good work! )

Hey I absolutely loved your story! At some parts it totally reminded me of myself since I'm a total dork and cant work my cell phone either! I would really like to read your Live Journal version :) Here's my username:reelirishdancer so yeah please add me! And thanks for writing a awesome story! :)

This was a really nice story loaded with lots of sexual tension- I liked that part a lot … hehe

Also I think you made your characters realistic, although sexy guy Parker is obviously just a fantasy man, I mean, there are no such perfect, slightly arrogant, yet loveable men in real world … sadly

I did love the constant teasing and how the love story developed in general, however I must admit that I didn’t like the whole moving-in fiasco. If you wanted them to live together, they could have been roommates or something … but the thing with the robbery just didn’t sit well with me. However, I guess, this is a common problem in a lot of stories … the strange coincidences that bring the two protagonists together and for me it’s simply unrealistic. But yeah, fiction is called fiction for a reason )

And for me, the whole stringing along thing was a little unclear. I mean, Tiffany saw them sleeping in the same bed at the time she thought that she and Parker were having a ‘break’ and then, later, was surprised that he chose Ash. But yeah, my guess is that you got a little confused about what you really wanted to happen with Tiffany and what not and mixed some of your ideas together…

I liked the thing with the side story a lot. Cute and I hope you will publish another story, where she tells him she’s pregnant? I’m sorry, for some weird reason I love those stories –hehe. Oh and I forgot to mention, in my mind Parker is some sexy god who’s gaze is blazing hot and I wish he were real. Oh, and the think with the kiss and the money? Hilarious! Actually, your story made me laugh often and I loved it.

Woww..nice story.

I only just finished reading it.

Soo I'm interested in reading the unabriged version of the last chapter over LJ.

Add me? My username is Leepingly.

Thanks,

Ly

HAHAHA! Jizz in my pants is so funny. Great chapter by the way. I love the story so far. Great work.

hey! Loved the story! Thanks!

Lived it!

This is so cute. I feel like Ashlyn sometimes so it's nice to read a story where the shy character gets the guy. I totally want to read the smut, haha...I always get this really nice lovey-dovey feeling from it. My username is dreamydaydream . :)