Hello!

Amazing story so far. I just realised this is on harperteen fanlit too(i'm princessofparis over there btw) Anyhoo keep up the good work, this is a great story :)

Update!

This seems like it'll be pretty interesting. I can't wait to see how you describe the ranch and place Casey there. :)

You may want to proofread a bit before posting a new chapter, though. When you're saying:

"I'm so sorry, sir." I reply in mock seriousness.

There should be a comma after "sir". You do that with ALL your dialogue that doesn't end in a question mark, exclamation point, or hyphen.

I'd also like to suggest that for future stories, try not to cram so many characters and names in at once. I'm still very confused on who's who. In a very short section of the store you introduced Casey, her mom and her dad, her dog, and then all of a sudden we've got Amanda and Carly and a slut from out of nowhere and Mandy and Andrew and Adam and Tyler and Aaron and Morgan- it's way too much for one chapter. I used to do that, too, and it took a while to stop, but it's a lot better for the reader's sake.

Waiting patiently for chapter 2,

Kioasakka

good chapter! can't wait for the next one!

This sounds like its gonna be really good so far. i cant wait to see her in texas...and hear more about her past with tyler. well update soon!

interesting plot

Poor thing (but wow she's handling i really well)

i can't wait to read more and see where you go with this

please update soon