Reviews for Project Topaz
Lardlax chapter 2 . 12/8/2007
Ah, she's cool!

She's like a kitsune :)

I noticed a mistake. But it's not a major one: "Nisshoku waist"

It should be "Nisshoku's waist"

Maybe that's just a typo though :p

More please :)

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Trunks
Lardlax chapter 1 . 12/8/2007
I'm actually reviewing :D

Sorry it took for ages, but I've been so busy with college recently :(

Anyway, I really liked this first chapter and I can tell this going to be an interesting story.

There were a couple of bits where the first and third person got confused though, such as in the line:

"The loud clank of automatic rifles firing at us rang all the while. Just as they rounded a corner, Orik yelled"

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Trunks
Twilight Starr chapter 2 . 12/6/2007
Very interesting *powers*. I'm interested to see what happens next. Nice work.

Twilight Starr
Red Serpens chapter 2 . 12/6/2007
Why, hullo.

All-around good story, but something's just bugging me, so I gotta let it out.

You spelled the chapter name wrong. It's not 'Discoverey,' it's 'Discovery.'

Yes, I'll go shut up that pet peeve now.

Write more.

Or else.

-smiles innocently-
Kaida Shade chapter 2 . 12/6/2007
A good start, keep going on this. Review mine?
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 12/1/2007
I'm thinking Lash as in dangerous backlash. You definitely have interesting fighters. Nice reference to Star Wars. Identical missiles and blacking out don't sound good. Looks like it's going to be a good plot. Good luck with writing, this story, and life. Have an excellent day.

Twilight Starr