Reviews for A Bit like a Brush Fire
faerie-gumdrops chapter 4 . 1/20/2008
I'm back!

So yeah, really nice chapter here. I like the way that we get to see her friends in this chapter, and learn a lot about them. Ellen is cool, and I love that they met in a porn shop. You've managed to define all of your characters really well here. I wonder if anything will come of the way that she's in love with Sam (loved that 'I was so in love with him that it hurt' part).

Yay battleships! And pirate voices! Double funness.

I don't like Jason's girlfriend either, the way that she makes him leave them all. But maybe it is a real emergency, I don't know. It is annoying when friends drop you for their other halves, though.

A few typos, but nothing a good read through won't cure:

she and her parents had stuck up an arrangement that suited both parties adn kept the peace

I twasn't even an option to leave the store

I grumbled and moved to the neartest shelf

Seven months ago he had finally falled for one girl

The spaghetti turen out so salty it was practically inedible

He wore a lot fo dark baggy sweaters and small pants.

This was our time to catch up with each other if anything exciting had happened during that weed
faerie-gumdrops chapter 3 . 1/20/2008
Hey! Me again!

This speaks to me so much, because I lost my Granddad too (although I was much younger than the narrator) and it is so strange and painful.

The ending of this chapter was so powerful. Seriously, this is one of the best things I've read in ages. Absolutely loved the part about the cancer patients as well - it's so touching. Also, the way that the narrator drifts off into thought about stuff (including the cancer patients) is really interesting and realistic. The part about the talk show man was also brilliant.

I would kill for your writing style!

Typos:

'I leapt from my bed adn fell to the floor'

'The coffee maker was silten'

'No on eslept there anymore'

'His beard was too well-trimmed too be dignified' second too should be to

'she was no longer just the black caner that was eating away at her body'

Loved it! Have to go and get food now, but will check back later.
faerie-gumdrops chapter 2 . 1/20/2008
I don't know why this hasn't got more reviews - it's absolutely beautiful! You're writing is so mature and interesting compared with many fictionpress writers' (especially mine!) and it totally blew me away! Also, loved the theme of loss here, and it seems so realistic and heartfelt. So sad.

Also, I absolutely loved the rotting walnut part, and the way that death is here too. Seriously, how did you come up with these ideas? They're great!

I found a couple of typos:

'I souhgt a hammer from the garage'

'I chucked the walnut adn teh husk as far as they would go'

Oh, also in the summary, I don't think the apostrophe is needed on the second it's.

This is great stuff!