Reviews for Eternity
TEEZEE chapter 1 . 12/2/2007
"As all watch with faces drawn"

The rhythm is slightly off here. I think having a one syllable word instead of 'as all' would fix it.

"I screamed, but no one listened

For I knew it all along."

That's very sad. :(

"The world left continues barbaric ways"

:( I know.

"And eternity spins on."

That is really good.