|Reviews for Eternity|
| TEEZEE chapter 1 . 12/2/2007
"As all watch with faces drawn"
The rhythm is slightly off here. I think having a one syllable word instead of 'as all' would fix it.
"I screamed, but no one listened
For I knew it all along."
That's very sad. :(
"The world left continues barbaric ways"
:( I know.
"And eternity spins on."
That is really good.
HURRAH FOR RHYMES!