|Reviews for sitting in a standing shower|
| siphoned afterglow chapter 1 . 4/15/2008
hmm, i think i like the way you write. the starting line was impressive and grabs attention. i like this piece. makes me think of contemplating life in the shower. lovely piece.
| XsilentXescapeX chapter 1 . 3/30/2008
I smiled when i heard the first line (a jackknife to the tendon
of toleration) because i knew it was going to be good. And it was!
One thing that threw me off was this line
"where you’re going the
the sun bathes the canopy"
im not sure if you put the two "the"'s in there by accident or on purpose but it messed up my flow when i was reading it...but besides that i liked it, all the imagery and words you use.
| Dis-Netis chapter 1 . 12/8/2007
I really liked this- very nice imagery. Also I think theres a lovely rhythm to this poem (without it rhyming) that makes it flow really well. I loved the ending as well- very evocative.
| Princess-anna57 chapter 1 . 12/7/2007
Interesting concept. I like it. Well done. Write on!