Reviews for An Accidental Fairytale |
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![]() ![]() A shubbery! My kingdom for a shrubbery! |
![]() ![]() I loved this story. I would BUY it, had I the chance. Did you ever write the sequil? |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love it! I couldn't stop reading i stayed up till 3 am just to finish it. Please tell me you are writing a follow up? |
![]() ![]() ![]() whoa I loved it! AL off the fairy tale it was soo awesome |
![]() ![]() ![]() I absolutely loved your story. I'm glad Toby is now kinda safe. It was an accomplishment to include so may fairy tales in one story, well-done. Are you ever planning on writing a sequel to this - I'd love to read more? :) If I were to guess, I'd say the princesses were in or were their artifacts. Please let me know if you ever write a sequel :D |
![]() ![]() ![]() luving it omg! THEO ROCKS MY SEXY NON-PJZ is it jus me or didnt theo turn up before dom? which im asuming means hes her true love? hope theres a sequel |
![]() ![]() ![]() Review Marathon! (-points to link on profile-) I like Dominic; he seems really nice and I'm glad he's looking out for Toby. I also like both of their moms because they're so...quirky. Quirky characters are good. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Review Marathon! (-points to link on profile-) I like how well you've managed to balance dialogue, action, and description, because it's a difficult balance to achieve. I also like Toby because I can relate to her really well, having been bullied myself and too afraid to speak out. I think her reasoning for being quiet definitely makes sense. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Review Marathon! (If you're confused, there's a link on my profile.) I like that you started right in the middle of some action, because it's a good way to wake some readers up. Like me. ;) I also liked the end, because you drew attention to something seemingly insignificant...so I sort of want to read more to find out about the spaghetti. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wait, what? So I'm going to imply that Theo and Toby end up together because that's what this older lady wants to happen? I really love this story, but I don't think I quite understand what "she did" when the woman is watching what was going on. |
![]() ![]() ![]() So was it what I thought it'd be? Hardly, but I want you to keep going, because your vocabulary is really advanced compared to mine, and you have chops, if you keep going I think ideas will just explode into advance creative pieces and the writing will be incredibly... improved. I didn't really understand this chapter so much but it has that, "ooh the plots going to extra mysterious" vibe. This was a very enchanting story indeed. I certainly can't wait for the sequel. Although I think because this wasn't really Toby's POV you could've added more description and that it was just a bit rushed, I'm relieved that Dom's not heartbroken, though. And I think that the epilogue will bring up a long list of questions and a fresh canvas of exciting trouble in the future. Hope you plan it out enough, and take time cooking up a serious out-of-the-box storyline. Can't wait, but will. You deserve an ear-splitting round of applause. Splendid job :) Please just don’t make Jenny nice, I have a feeling you might. That’s just so unbelievable, she’s a cruel bag and if she becomes her friend, it will definitely be unrealistic, urgh. Yes there are area’s that could be improved grammar and sentence structure wise and tiny stuff, but that can be fixed at any time, just focus on something original for me on future sequel. There's so many things that spark idea's each day that you could have missed. But yep, did I say you did a splendid job? Better have because I meant it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() YEYYEYYASZHJDGASJKZHDEX YOYU UOPDARTED |
![]() ![]() ![]() Bravo! I loved every bit of this story. I loved Theo and kept hoping that something would happen to where he and Toby would live happily ever after. I really really hope you write another story.. since it seems you're leading into one with your ending.. (crossing fingers). Again.. wonderful job.. it was a magical story that gave me all kinds of good feelings : ) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yay! I love it! I so totally love it! ~Kicon |
![]() ![]() ![]() Nice. I want Theo! |