Reviews for Behind Closed Doors
Katie. H. 27 chapter 3 . 2/9/2008
This is getting really good! I can't wit to find out what happens next!
Mrs.Teacup chapter 3 . 1/16/2008
I didn't spot any errors, but you know I'm not good at that kind of thing! LOL!

Anyway, your writing for this story is probably some of your best ever! I'm very impressed with all of the description that you gave in this chapter! AWESOME job!
Mrs.Teacup chapter 2 . 12/9/2007
Poor Leah! I would be scared to death traveling that far all alone and then getting a greeting like that! *shivers* Your writing is very good for this story, as I said in my last review! Keep up the AWESOME work! UPDATE SOON! :D
Mrs.Teacup chapter 1 . 12/7/2007
WOW! That was SO good, sis! I think it's some of the best writing that you've ever done! I'm ver impressed! :D FANTASTIC job! I loved it! UPDATE SOON PLEASE!
reada chapter 1 . 12/7/2007

I would use "hesitation" or "hesitancy" instead of "hesitance" near the end of the excerpt.

I found the first couple of paragraphs awkward. But by the 3rd paragraph it was flowing.

You could say something like "An oak casket with a bouquet of roses gracing the cover of the shiny wood sat near a deep hole, prepared to make its final journey." (Since the roses are on the cover, it's obvious it's closed.)

Hope that helps.