|Reviews for kissing for the wrong reasons, fall|
| TeapotLid chapter 1 . 12/9/2007
The image is really nice and intruiging . I think maybe snow shouldnt have quotes round it that first time it's mentioned, i dunno, when I read it without the quotations it sounds better in my head...and back to the image, it's unique , I think maybe it could be translated a bit more, I don't know, more subtly? sorry that's not the clearest piece of advice...maybe change around the words describing the kissing and feeling alone/connected, perhaps link each one to a similar image? it's late so I could just be talking rubbish...but overall it's very good, with slightly more indepth wording at the end could be more complete. but good!
*sorry, I wrote too much...must sleep...*
| smile for the sunshine chapter 1 . 12/8/2007
that's really really pretty jess. i love it. )
| dollface and her cancer chapter 1 . 12/8/2007
this is sharp edged and lovely.