meh, it's the love.

you made me feel.. everything at the same time.

rah.

I loved it. mission successfully completed in my opinion, i'm such a sucker for this genre ;O)

It was one of those stories that made my stomach turn to a a jumbled pile of knots. It was a story that was gripping and I felt like I was there, feeling her pain and anguish as if it were my own. I can't say I particularily enjoyed the storyline but the way you wrote it was amazing. I loved the description of the storm especially.

i really i like dis storyy!

it waz realii interestingg!

This was really good!

aw, that situation sucks for all three of them. i'd hate that! it was a good oneshot though ~ Alenor.

um, wow. There's so many wonderful things to say about this story and yet having just read through it and feeling like i've been on an emotional rollercoaster with them, i cant quite find the words to express them. Truly brilliant.

Great One Shot...

If it were me.. I don't even think I can make a decision at all..

I probably be the one running away and moving away..

it was fucking great. DRAMA BIG TIME. bring it on i say.

well let me just say.

THIS WAS AMAZING.

i really liked it

and even though its not like what you usually write,

you did a really great job of writing it.

it evoked emotion in all the right places

AND came with a happy(ish) ending.

i think if you ever write a story with this type of genre.

it would be absolutely fantastic and i would not hesitate in reading it.

aww

that's so cuteness

in a totally not cute way

:) i liked it

izzie

i loved it.

ive been waiting for you to update your other stories but this just made up for all the time i waited.

i feel bad for davey but i like mac.

gwah this is really good. xD i dig the heated passion/angst/romance! my only qualm is that in Mac's dialog, "Mac snorted, 'You think I have any answers for you? I thought it was sorted. I left home and,'" you misspelled "sordid." Otherwise, sexy fantastic story!

I normally don't like the whole "first one then the other brother" stuff, but you really did a great job.

A few comments:

It should be "Decision time, Peanut", emphasis on that comma.

There are a couple places where you use exclamation points where a period will work just fine.

The bulk of the story is good, even if it is long, but there are a few parts where it drags. She keeps going in circles with Mac and the scene with his parents is just confusing.

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