I absolutely love this story! It's so well-written and I could practically feel the emotions of Evie and Mac. Still, I feel pretty bad for Davey ):

I've yet to read a story of yours that I don't love to death! I think this one would have made an awesome full length story, though, starting when she was introduced to Mac. It would have been great! And Mac and Evie reminded me of Charlie and Max in Lighthouse Charlie, which I think is my favourite one so far! Awesome stuff though, really!

Oh, that was just wonderful. Thank you for writing it. :)

I love this story so much. Really. Even though I hate Evie and although Mac has an incredibly sexy vibe, I find his character to be pretty despicable. I think it's amazing how even though I think your main characters are essentially terrible people, I still really love this story. It's well-written and their chemistry is so palpable. Awesome job!

I actually had tears in my eyes near the end.

Whats wrong with you? What is with all the sadness then happiness but tears everywhere?

Great story, I love your writing!

I loved it, it was so...authentic! :D

I see you used the term 'SledgeHammer' and it made me think of Jack from So Much to Learn! I see you like the word 'hammer!'

Keep writing! :D

This is cool, and I am glad she broke up with him.

I really liked it. And to me it seemed to go pretty smoothly, I like the way it's set up because it believable. Something that could happen to anyone.

wow. i feel so bad for davie. poor boy!

I love your work. What I like about this story is that is a story all on its own with a beginning and an end but it could also be a bigger story too. You have a way with words. No on to reading something else you wrote :)

whoaa. i didn't even know it was possible to pack so much emotion into a one shot..

This is so beautiful!

that was kind of tragic. I'm... I'm not sure how I feel about it. Because like, you want her to go with Mac, right? But you know she's totally whipped her boyfriend. So if you were her boyfriend's friend, you'd hate her, right? As their parents you might hate her. Are her actions justifiable? Imagine how family get togethers will be in the future! :( how awful!

It was good. I kind of liked how you didn't use direct speech for the last confrontation between her and her boyfriend. It would've felt like too much dialogue.. I'm pretty torn about this LOL , wasn't there any other way? Where nobody could get hurt? I feel like there should be, but I'm not sure if there is actually. Wow, was this story meant to provoke so much thought? Hahaha. Good job on the writing :)

I absolutely love this story. I've read a lot of stories on here, but yours is my all time favorite oneshot. You did a great job, I would love to read more of these characters!