Reviews for these four walls |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I liked your other poems better. This one made no sense, haha. The first four lines and the second four lines portray graphic images of an emotion, but I don't see how they tie in with the last line - which is brilliantly worded, but seems like it doesn't belong there. I don't know. Great imagery and emotion, even if it is not easy to understand. Sometimes emotions just aren't -Jesse Attack of the review marathon! (link in profile) |
![]() ![]() ![]() god it's been so long! you're still deliciously angstful. love the repetition of messiah, certainly effective. |
![]() ![]() ![]() brilliant. just that. |
![]() ![]() ![]() interesting metaphors... I like it a lot |
![]() ![]() ![]() Amazing. My favorite phrase is, "i am a train/ trembling with coal in my veins", but the repitition of "messiah" is also intriguing as well. The overall idea is very well executed, and so beautifully poetic. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Holy cow! By far the coolest idea and poem. |
![]() ![]() ![]() What a wonderful mental image. My only critique is maybe a period after "hands over my mouth" to switch from one metaphor to the next. But then again, it's beautiful without it. Your choice. fave |