That was beautiful! Your writing will never cease to amaze me, each and every time.

I love your descriptions in this,

the spider reference especially.

Everything was just perfect, I could read this everyday.

i almost forgot this poem site existed, but I'm glad I thought of it yesterday...I've been going through my work of the past, and I just wanted to say thanks for being so supportive about my work

Something about this poem makes me feel so warm, yet quickly followed by a small tingle in my spine, especially with the last stanza. Something simple, something curious, something beautiful.

Quality, quality portrait. It aches with reality. Visual, true, honest, and made relatable through the mixture of details, and what isn't said. MD:77.

Pretty. The imagery is delicate, I love the mentions of spiders and thick threads. Nicely done. Love this bit: "I want to take each intake, take it/into me; swallow/every angle and edge."

Hillary.

You never fail to astound me with the beauty in your words, and the feelings they convey. I always love to read whatever poem you write. You had such description in this one, and I especially liked the breaking up of the stanzas. "All innocent, silent, and so still."

I think my favorite, though, was "I'm alone here in this space with you;/wandering without movement and words,/wallowing,/in love with falling out of love with you./Within you" That section just caught my breath.

Lovely, as always.

Much love...Tin

Dear Juliet,

It's always a pleasure to hear from you. Thanks for the kind remarks.

I look forward to you reading my story, but I'm going to have to remove the story for now. It didn't come out exactly like I wanted it to. I improvise alot when I write stories, and as I develop it lots of old stuff usually needs to be revamped. And I often feel like my stories are very peculiar, and unsatisfactory. I'm very sensitive about what I write and how it comes out. So that will have to wait, I'm curious to see what you think of my writing style though. I write stuff quickly, I'll probably have something up this or the next following night. Once it's up again I plan to stay with it until the end, another thing I have a hard time doing!

What else did I want to say?

Oh yeah, Fiona Venus was very fun to read. I have a secret: all my creative writing comes from math class. Ironic isn't it?

Need to get going but keep in touch,

- J :)

interesting piece.. I love your descriptions.. the braids thing and the spider thing were awesome.. I also really like the line "in love with falling out of love with you"

This poem feels very rich with warmth, contrary to your most recent poems that have been marred by possible fights and emotional tension. Hopefully I am right? It's superb you're finally seeing the sunrise, wherever you are Juliet.

'wallowing,

in love with falling out of love with you.

Within you,

your face

frozen against my breast.'

I pictures in blue (for some reason) a frozen moment in time. Frozen and blue... hmm, goes together. So yeah, I conjured up this intimate moment of calm peace when I read this. My favorite part of your poem.

Keep it up,

- Julian

so surreal. good job. sometimes the best thing in the world is just to sleep beside the one you love. :)