Reviews for The Opposition Play
Terras1fan-inactive chapter 5 . 12/22/2007
Oh, I am so intrigued.

Some minor typos are in these first five chapters, so I suggest rereading and editing them out. Sorry, I can't tell you where, but I can say it is looking good. Some parts are rough, but the plot seems good. Keep it up and make sure everything done is something a normal girl in an emotional state would do. Don't make her too drama queen insane.

In fact, I'd love it if she went back to the Seybert guy and acted like nothing happened. Freak him out a bit because he will be expecting her to do SOMETHING. Then when he finally feels comfortable, get 'em.

, I'll be reading.
fuiman chapter 5 . 12/22/2007
wow... this's far better than i expected...

good job... but even if that Seyfert Carey is a son of bitch, still pity him somehow as he had to break up with 3 girls at once... still, my friend, good job... gratZz.. P
octoberprincess chapter 2 . 12/21/2007



shud jst put denise or sumt :O chapter 5 . 12/20/2007
Cute chapter. I hope Seyfert gets what's coming to him.
octoberprincess chapter 1 . 12/20/2007
:P gambateh! :)

love you!
InvisibleLight chapter 4 . 12/19/2007
Okay, forget the minor damage. Just give me the guys address and I'll go there and kick his ass. Lol, no girl deserves that, not even Cindy. Good chapter though (: Update soon

-GN Perone
InvisibleLight chapter 2 . 12/19/2007
High-class jerk right there, people. Sheesh, now I REALLY want to punch him. And add a few kicks in the guy's uncomfortable spot just for simple pleasure. Haha, but Esper deserves so much better. (: Good chapter

-GN Perone
InvisibleLight chapter 1 . 12/19/2007
Aww, poor girl. I wanna punch that dude so bad right now! (If he was real and in punching range, of course) I love it so far! (:

-GN Perone
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