It's very good, I like it a lot, but its a little confusing. I like the twist at the end, but up to that, I started getting a little bit confused.

But yeah, its really good. Great work :D

hmm interesting twist. i like the story. only thing i could find was this in the 3rd paragraph:

In eighth grad, he set aside baseball

u just forgot the e on grade. sry i couldnt help more.