If only we all had our own Liam Mansers. -sigh-

This was pretty amazing, though!

Stumbled upon this. Super cute. Well written and developed characters. Almost wish there was a sequel of sorts to see how these two progress in their relationship. But fine as it is too :O) I'm just greedy.

sweet story but i still dont understand liam and his, 'dont ask why' and think carefully b4 you speak'.

Super cute (:

i really enjoyed reading this story.

Very cute. Loved it. :)

Super, super, SUPER one-shot! :) Great job! :)

Peace, Love and Happiness! :)

~Bubbly Girl

Cute story !

Not my type of guy but that doesnt matter, theyre so cute together. :D

Wow... I've always loved stories where one guy either avoided girls because of one girl, or dated a ton of girls because of one girl... of course, that whole time, the girl has secretly liked them lol

awesome oneshot! there should be this community for these kind of stories, then i could get my fill of them :D

cheers!

aw.

i loved this.

Good story. Thanks for sharing.

The story is so adorable.

I love it! XD

And Gaspard Ulliel is hot!

That was awesome! D

I like the plot but it's a little jerky. For example, towards the end, it was so erupt. From the part where after Liam explained about his real intentions behind the facade, you had Jenna make the move too quick. In reality, she needs to be a little doubting the whole "surrealness" of the situation. And when she is dazed, Liam will move in on her and closing the gap between them and then, maybe you can allow Jenna to come to her senses and start the kissing (although if it had been me, I'd let Jenna pull back a little in hesitation and I wouldn't have ended the story the way you did.)

And for the part where Bryan came barging in, you shouldn't put it in the same sentence as Liam smiling against Jenna's lips. You could put it this way:

As I kissed him back with the same passion, I felt him smile lightly against me. "What the-" We pulled apart when Bryan chose that moment to barge into my room, startling the both of us. (or in your own words-you are better at it, I have to give you that.)

And people usually don't smile at their supposed lover after being witnessed by their younger siblings especially younger brothers. Maybe you can say that they looked flushed or something. But when her brother left, they can go back to kissing or the likes of it.

Then again, it's just my suggetions, you don't have to take it if you don't want to. Ohter than that, you're doing fine. Keep it up. Kudos!

This story was...odd in a poignant way. If that makes any sense.

At first I didn't understand why he kept telling her not to ask 'why'. I was like why what?

Then as the story progressed to the meeting- I felt that that came out of nowhere. The (sort of) embrace by the vending machine was hard to imagine with the characters you built.

The ending baffled and surprised me as I did not see it coming- and the explanation he gave for why he didn't talk to girls seemed far-fetched.

You do have skill in writing, however I felt this script was choppy and took a completely different turn from the way it began.

Nevertheless keep writing, and thank you for the brief entertainment.

I have to admit that this is really cheesy. But, you know what... I love it. Very much, actually. :D Good job!