Reviews for The Pack
Kem'Ajiana chapter 51 . 7/23/2009
I just had to read the

that is so sad, it made me cry a little! Great job on your story! :)

and poor audree ):
Kem'Ajiana chapter 5 . 7/23/2009
I /adore/ the Sight By Clement-Davies!

Great job btw! I have only gotten this far, but it rocks! :P
elephant tears chapter 30 . 5/18/2008
this chapter was really good. really graphic but really good too. great job writing this. i have to say i think that Self Inflicted by Smile Empty Soul would be the best. i listened to all 3 songs and i think this one is best.

awesome job!

can't wait to read more!
elephant tears chapter 29 . 5/10/2008
i luved all the emotion in this chapter.

i almost went through the same thing this year but i caught myself rite before it went out of control.

can't wait to read more and i'm so glad that audree finally opened up.

great chapter

don't worry bout the wait, we all hav needs. D

awesome job!
elephant tears chapter 28 . 4/7/2008
ok so i get wat ur saying about if this should go b/c it doesn't actually go w/ the plot. and to tell u the truth the beginning of the chapter i was like...wats with this?

but its still part of ur story.

i don think it really matters if there's the same person 2 times but if thats against the style of the story then its ur story.

wat i think mite be good is if u put this part at the end of teh other chapter. so that chapters 27 & 28 are both just in 27.


but besides that

good writing techniques

i do luv that jen was brought here, i had like totally forgotten about her! lol ]

great job!
elephant tears chapter 27 . 3/30/2008
ah! marching band! gotta luv it! (even if it is the WORST hours ever!)

great job!

can't wait for the next chapter!

not much left to say unless i wanna keep going AWESOME JOB, b/c that's all i hav to say about this. b/c it WAS awesome.


so ... spectacular job?

elephant tears chapter 26 . 3/23/2008
haha married couple arguments! i've been in plenty of those (and seen even funnier ones, guy vs guy is the best.)


great chapter

much longer than the last few

is next chapter finally the audree thing? plz

lol jk.

awesome job!

anxiously awaiting more!
elephant tears chapter 25 . 3/18/2008

i can totally picture this chapter as a great monolouge for like an audition or a play. it's like... perfect.

this whole story could pretty easily be translated into a play with some tweaking.

lol but that's just my playwright side getting to me. ]

now back to the story!

great chapter.

i luv micheal! he was totally... POWERFUL this chapter.

but a different powerful from just: I CAN KIcK UR ASS.

he actually reminded me a bit of my friend ricky in part of it. with the whole relationship thing and how they hate when people talk like that.

now THAT made me laugh b/c its so true!

great job!

can't wait!
elephant tears chapter 24 . 3/10/2008
rite now it seems like ... idk, a beginning of the story. u know wat i mean? its like we're still learning background info about the characters instead of going w/ the plot. no offense at all of course, just felt like saying it. lol

besides that i like all the things they do and stuf and i can't WAIT for the audree thing.

great job
elephant tears chapter 22 . 2/18/2008
haha, yay! i liked that! i like how you got to see the other 85% of Michael's life! lol. great chapter and i love how cute Michael was when Jen was like "You SO like Jesse" that was SO cute!

can't WAIT for a next chapter! and great job on the update! that was like.. REALLY fast.

AWESOME CHAPTER (like always.)

great job!
elephant tears chapter 21 . 2/15/2008


luv this so much.

omg i had a guy friend who i used to do the same like debating thing. we could debate about ANYTHING. and it'd usually be a pretty good debate... lol

can't WAIT to see what happens next.

sorry for not reviewing for so long, i totally just haven't had that much time for fictionpress lately.









tinybones chapter 20 . 2/8/2008
I love this story.

I hope they can help Audree.

Depression does indeed suck.

Continue please.
elephant tears chapter 18 . 1/26/2008


i can't wait for some jesse/micheal scenish stuf!

great chapter

can't wait for the next one!
elephant tears chapter 17 . 1/25/2008
haha facebook... gotta luv it.

any way, good chap, i like the planning stuf.

i think that to get her to say she's seeing a shrink jesse should be like "OMG I HATE MY SHRINK"

and then if audree is seeing one she'll be like "ME 2!"


just thinking and i don't know why!


sry for not reviewing in a while!

great chapter!

can't wait!
elephant tears chapter 15 . 1/18/2008
i'm sry i havn't read/reviewed in so long. i've just been pretty busy. (region band tryouts are soon ah!) anyway.

i luv the last few chapters.

i like that we finally got to see inside jesse's mind about the suicidal stuf and i luv how micheal treated her when she was sad and that she likes him and stuf.

i'm glad that audree finally gave in to them because she just had to!

can't wait to see what happens next!

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