|Reviews for Reality within a dream|
| OneLastEndeavor chapter 1 . 2/2/2008
This one made me smile. Nicely written and easy to understand yet I can't seem to shake off the feeling that there is a deeper, underlying meaning here. That's a good thing.
You seem to have a knack of ending poems with brilliant lines. Again, love that last line!
Only criticism I can give you is to change the "'cause" to "because". What you have now makes the poem seem informal and you unintelligible about the English language.
| XxXKristie MarieXxX chapter 1 . 1/3/2008
Honestly I didn't like it as much as your other work. I loved the first two lines, and other lines scaterd through out. But the messege is beautiful and I love the title. But I have faith in what is to come of your work. GL keep writing!
| simpleplan13 chapter 1 . 12/24/2007
the invisible scar get wider... gets
I like this a lot.. its very heartbreaking... the wounds thing was really great.. awesome job
| Nonya Soum chapter 1 . 12/23/2007
Each line feels like it came from a dream. One of those dreams that feels like a bunch of dreams put together and somehow makes sense. I like your take on reality and/or/vs. dreams. The three questions really speak for the poem well. Also, the last 4 lines (who is going to wait for me?/just having you for one more day/I know my heart isn't hurt/can I become attached to feelings?) are really interesting. When I first read them, I thought they were out of place, then I read it all over again and I think I got it. I can't explain my reactions to this poem, but it's very thought provoking. I like it. (which reminds me... I haven't reviewed you in a while... hm...) Great job!