Reviews for Baby, It's Cold Outside
DragonOwl chapter 1 . 3/2/2014
I really enjoyed that! But the weird thing is, I thought the main character was a boy - it's actually a girl, right? I found out from reading the other comments *sheepish look* I was reading through, and I'm not sure if I missed some sort of sign, but anyhoo, it works both genders! I had to read it again from a different genders point of view when I realised my mistake! I really liked the awkward feeling throughout with her becoming snappy. My favourite part was the text he sent and the part when she was too scared to look him in the eye :D
Moon Prynces chapter 1 . 10/13/2013
There were so many awesome things going on in this story and I just had to tell you how much I loved it and why.

First, I love the girl's personality. It was so cute and endearing. I loved that she found herself getting angry and defensive and being just plain mean to the guy that she liked and it sort of came off as her hating him a bit. I guess I've just read too many stories where characters blush and it starts to come off as unrealistic, because not everyone changes color when embarrassed or trying to hide their feelings. Anyway, her attitude was adorable and I just don't see it often enough. It's definitely different than the "hate that I love you" types. I absolutely loved this description of her behavior: "And there I go again. Always adding unnecessary bite to my words, being sarcastic, snapping or poking fun at him for no reason, or sometimes just ignoring him. Andy would always point out in amusement how crushes made me act like elementary school boy; it's a sad and sorry truth." I also loved how she said, "I really did feel bad for this kid, having me crushing on him. It makes me wonder why he still talked to me at all. I act mean towards him and impolite..." She was like a child, unsure how to react or what to say. Sometimes it was a little all over the place, like when she snapped "No!" and "Mine" in response to him taking back his jacket. It almost came off as uncharacteristically flirty or something, considering how mean and cold she was just moments earlier. Still, she was so innocent and inexperienced that her every thought and action was just so adorable to read. It actually seemed so real and natural, not overdone or overly-naïve.

Ben was also a cool, cute character (alliteration!?) to read. I liked how comfortable he seemed throughout their conversation until he decided to ask her out. He just seemed so nice and fun and understanding. The way you dealt with his confession and him feeling rejected were also so well done. You didn't automatically jump to having him accept her silence in less than a minute and then walk away quietly with tail between his legs. He still tries to explain himself and says she should give him a chance. It was all so real and realistic. He seemed like a person I might actually meet in real life somewhere, or maybe he's already based off someone you know. It sure felt that way.

There were so many little details in there that made everything feel so much more real. Like the scent you described – not overdone or cliché or weird, but natural and uncertain because this is from the point of view of a teenage girl and not some romance novelist who has a way with words. And her mistake of saying he smelled tasty. It made me smile in an 'aw, look at her...' way. Also, that nose staring thing was cute. I loved that he noticed and addressed it.

Other small things were in the way she felt when noticing he (her crush) remembered something she'd said before (about the laptop) or being secretly happy her dad hadn't actually forgotten about her or just feeling that being wrapped up in his sweater was something so intimate. It just felt like you captured so many real feelings and thoughts in a realistic way – the same way any person would think or feel them.

On a random note... Bemusement! Thank you so much for using that word correctly. So many (too, too many) times I read people using it as a synonym for amusement, so that I get irritated whenever I see it happening. It's just so ridiculous!

I loved your ending – nothing was forced or rushed. There wasn't any need for a dramatic kiss or something, because all the drama was in the way you described the feelings going on. It was amazing, and so refreshing to read. I feel like this is what everyone goes through, and I feel like I'm sixteen again when reading this.

The conversation throughout flowed so well too. Sometimes long conversations in a story come off as tedious with unnecessary dialogue that don't add anything, but somehow the whole thing was put together almost perfectly. It all just fit, and everything moved it forward to the pair's confession.

The way you wrote was wonderful and your main character's every thought was something I could relate to. It was all just so cute, without the need to be fluffy or perfect. I just realized...we don't even know her name, do we? But it was so amazing that I never really noticed!

That was a great read, and I so wish you had more stories. Still, I'll keep an eye out for anything you might write in the future.

xoxo
theKnobblyKneedWriter chapter 1 . 6/26/2012
Made me smile :)
Midnight113 chapter 1 . 9/19/2010
This was so cute, I really enjoyed it. That last line from him is perfect. Well done!
blurrylights chapter 1 . 11/30/2009
That was so cute! And so worth not spending 3.5 minutes doing my hair for school. :P
Stuck in Silver chapter 1 . 7/17/2009
Ben was so cute! *squeals* This is adorable ]
Earthamay chapter 1 . 7/3/2009
That was really too cute.. You know, near the end, Love Story by Taylor Swift started playing.. Idk I just felt like it fit. Haha
x3life chapter 1 . 6/15/2009
aw how cute )
SparklingStar25 chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
Cute oneshot!

and his last sms was AdoRable!
Pinkamoo chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
Aw. How very Casper and that other girl that isn't Wendy. With the 'can I keep you' thing, I mean.

I sympathise with the girl. I'd probably act the same way. Le sigh. Oblivious-ness is not good.

I liked your story! Sweet as job, my friend ;)
futureauthor852 chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
Thats cute and I like how they didn't kiss...it makes it more believable. Great Job ~Angela
mia5081 chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
Aw, that was cute. I especially liked Ben, but that might be because he just seemed like someone I would want to like me )

Great job!

~Mia
Blinking Cursor chapter 1 . 6/8/2009
Very sweet and nice. I enjoyed this immensely. Thank you for the story. ;)
Lily Llynn chapter 1 . 6/7/2009
Overly cute, super cliche, incredibly fluffy, and yet:

I loved it. (:

I don't care if it's cold outside if it makes awesome oneshots like this. (: I'm very glad xoxluurve added this to our c2.
victoriai434 chapter 1 . 6/7/2009
“I hardly know you. Yet you give me something that makes me scared, all right? I figured that it was nothing, you know? This is probably just some silly teenage crush; and as corny as it sounds, you always seem to make my day brighter. But, I guess... I’m willing to give it a try.”

you give me something - james morrison, anyone?

I liked your story though! Don't think otherwise! It's just funny I think!
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