I likes it.

aw this was so cutee! haha

I could figure things out (a bit predictable and cliched) but it's alright, since this was well-written. (: I honestly don't mind cliches if they're written amazingly. My only criticism would be that you used this: "..my delusions to be shattered just yet." Delusions is used improperly; the word you're looking for is illusions.

But this was well-written and creative in its own way, and I like it, so I'm adding it to my c2. (:

Very sweet. I love the idea, two people observing the other, always missing glances. I really like the flow of the story and how the girl's appearance isn't stated. Because, honestly, how many people mentally describe themselves during the day? I enjoyed the ending; just the right amount of detail.

All in all, it was 'Perfectly worded.'

(If I do say so myself)

Raithya

Kadie... -whines- That was impossibly sweet. I loved it so much. You have no idea.

Bah.

I'm gonna go read it again.

-squeals-

I still can't get over it.

It was surreal. Like, idk. It was really real. lol I'm so eloquent.

That was so awesome.

I'mma read it for the third time. :P

Aw... how sweet. Great work on this one! I love it! :)

Aw that was so cute, so cute. Loved it.

JM

aw

i thought that was awesome ] and not too short either ;)

yay! putting in my favs D

xx

I like this story. I read it yesterday, but I was unable to send a review. Now is my chance. xD

Personally, I like how you gave a pretty clear description of the boy, but barely anything for the girl. The reader can paint their own picture of the girl. They could even put themselves or their friends in her situation.

I like the realism intertwined with this story. It's almost completely believable and, at first, it felt like a diary entry. Did you write from experience? It sort of seems like it. :)

And just as a sidenote, artistic men are so cute. :3 Very enjoyable read. Hope to see more of your work soon.

Man, this is so adorable! I loved the fact that he drew her, 'cause for some reason, I was expecting him to be drawing scenery or something. Nice twists :D

It's nice...

but more descriptions on the girl please. ;)

Aww... Very cute story

this is adorable.

This is brilliant. I love the way that you use description. Every thing's so fluid and intense. You definitely have a sense of voice with your writing. I'm interested in knowing if this was one of your own experiences or if it's made up, because all the feelings are expressed very well.

Happy Holidays!