|Reviews for The Night Starts Here|
| Lady Alera Van Hexis chapter 1 . 1/4/2008
I don't have that long. I read your story and thought that it was a little confusing. It seemed like she was high, hallucinated through a lot of it. I would attempt to clarify some things, such as the lesson, because in the end, the ending seems very rushed. Other than that, very nice. I don't like you referenceing Harry Potter though. I don't know. It seems kind of immature. Fantastic. Touch up some of it and it will be perfect. Great idea!
Lady Alera Van Hexis
| rouquinamour chapter 1 . 1/3/2008
in one of the earlier paragraphs, use "man" instead of "guy". I love the formal, flowery language, stay with that rather than using colloquial slang.
slightly random... was this based off of a dream?
I don't enjoy the pop-culture references, but I like how you portray the characters!
very interesting... I like how it all ties in the end, and the song lyrics are perfect for the story! The story is quite... random... but it is good just the same. I would never have thought up of a story quite like this...!