This is a very fun poem, I felt happy and excited just by reading it, which is awesome. I'm not really sure if I was supposed to feel that way, but thats how I felt when reading it.

I like how your started the poem off with a sound effect, but if you want the full affect for the reading, sound effects like that should be kind of closed off to add emphasis on the sound. Another way to make the sound stand out is to also italicize it, it takes nothing more than a few slanted letters to catch the readers attention, and in this poem, only a few seconds is needed to get into the rythm of this poem, so good job on that.

Keep up the good writing!

-Durandel