Reviews for Beauty
Renee LH Gowri chapter 1 . 6/4/2008
One thing. The line "princesses had beauty but not trailer trash" didn't quite fit, but the rest was superb!

Your descriptions are out of this world and uncannily wonderful. "Sweet nothing". "The blue eyes are dead." "A smile is focused at no one."

All of it's awesome beyond words. Keep it up! :)
Twilight Starr chapter 1 . 1/8/2008
Great job telling a story. Nice work.

~Twilight Starr~
TaltushMeiMei chapter 1 . 12/29/2007
Interesting words and overall, interesting. However, the format (periods at the end of every line) makes this. Uncomfortable and. Awkward sounding. In general, I think the flow could have used a bit more effort or tweaking. I like the concept and I mostly like the execution, but with a smoother flow, this could be a much more polished poem. As is, very nice job.
A Free Elf chapter 1 . 12/29/2007
Funny kind of Spanish xD

I think you need to work on your rhythm a bit more, this was a jerky read.