|Reviews for The Disturbing Tales of Madruin, Local Hot-Headed Spaztastic Mage|
| 3M2R chapter 1 . 1/3/2011
Pretty engaging descriptions and action sequence.
i think too much was being crammed into one line. a bit tedious to read.
'madruin walked away, never looking away'. it's a little repetitive. because the word 'away' appeared twice in this line.
You could experiment with a little humour in this? I think it would be pretty cool to add some in (:
| Penmaster17 chapter 2 . 1/13/2008
I like this a lot better than chapter one. I'm a little confused about whats going on, however. Is their any real underlining plot or themes too this story? besides that I liked it.
Just a few nit-pickings:
1. Madruin walked deeper, deeper into where?
2. knocking unconscious the rest, this should be written knocking the rest of unconscious.
| Penmaster17 chapter 1 . 12/30/2007
I rather enjoyed. Imagery is stunning! although I think further description of the monsters would be a great improvement. The flow needs some help and it didn't make sense near end, it was still good. Awesome work!