|Reviews for Cold|
| relapse into change chapter 1 . 1/1/2008
okay first of all, i just need to say i like this
poem, it was nice, it wasn't the best poem ever but i liked it
one thing i didn't really like about this poem though is that you used the word 'cold' twice in the first and second lines, you might want to change the word 'cold' in the second line to something else but i don't know, it's your poem you can do whatever you want with it.
| Definition chapter 1 . 1/1/2008
Very nice - I love the transition between the last two lines.
The only thing I find slightly annoying with this is the use of 'cold'. You use it in the first line, and then again in the second line - You could probably replace 'cold earth' with something else, maybe 'frozen earth'? Also, the flow is a tiny bit rough - I feel that the flow itself can use some improvement.
Otherwise, this is an excellent poem that really cuts in deep.
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