I like this, and would very much like to read the next part. I like the soud/voice/style of Ram.

Interesting story. Good characters, interesting world and people. But too much explaining, too much telling. This has more amateurish feel than your other stories. First time I use word amateur reading your story.

World and characters are good. Definitely worth writing more.

this is hilarious, and confusing, but i like it, and i am once again hooked on one of your stories. Now i have two stories to check for updates.