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you are awesome for coming up with this as a story.

Your story is hilarious. I love Rezul's personality, it's so funny. Your writing is great too.

I wish I could write birthday letters like Rezul...

Hey, amazing chapter! I really liked it.

Have you ever heard of writer's cafe? Its like this site, yet better. I use it now. I think you would like it more than fictionpress. Anyway, I'd like to read more of your writing (loved the first sentence of this by the way.) and if you wanted to use that site, plz friend me on it!

I can give you a more comprehensive review later, currently my comp is about dead... (

Good job!

-Alex

I absolutely love this story! The creativity that you wield through Als is delightful - I can't help but read on to find out what other crazy things Rezul, Marshall, and the new friend Whit can shove Als into.

i LOLed so much. undead cellphone, lol. fantastic. you're a genius.

Has lost all dignity!

What is that supposed to mean?

Giving up writing?

Are you serious, if you give up writing I will hunt you down and lock you in a room with pen and parchment until you write again!

No, I most certainly do not think you should stop writing!

You are very inventive and your stories keep me interested. I believe you have potential!

I liked this chapter I was expecting it to end with Rezul or Marshal in the attic. (In fact I still expect it to.) But it was a real cliff hanger. There are a few letters left out in a sentence or two, that is all the mistakes I found. Keep this story going, it is good!

-Alex

(I am working on another story, it is a mixture of Cyrille and another idea. Expect it soon!)

That was delightfully silly.

A wonderful start. Time to read s'more. D

Hurray! You updated! I was beginning to worry.

Really like the new chapter, but I actually feel sorry for the poor meatloaf. I'm guessing that we haven't seen the last of him? Continue, please.

Just part way through this and wondering what Als age is supposed to be. At first I thought she was quite young (say 4 to 7 yrs or so) and then a lot older (say 10 yrs of age to a young teen) and then younger again and now I'm confused! Some her of language when she speaks makes her sound old, yet she's worried about being downstairs without an adult and hiding under beds. Hmm...

Anyway, this is quite inventive and I'm enjoying it so far. :D

Awesome. I love it. Great characters, funny story. Keep it up!

this is REALly good.

:)

it makes me smile.

haha.

This is odd, but very interesting. Please post the next chapter soon!

"Hope Insanity Isn't Contagious" ?

A good title, yet, I think that you could possibly find a better one for this story.

Ignoring the name, (which ruined the whole, entire story for me jk) I liked the story.

It was very detailed, and, seemingly well planned. I liked the part about giving the monster a few more wacks, then backing off. I could see her giving it (the monster) a few more wacks with the almighty bunny / sword / weapon / thing, then backing off, and looking at it cowering on the floor.

As well, I enjoyed the "Return from whence ye came' quote.

I always thought it would be fun to say that!

In the story, you really venture into the Als head, (the whole scene with counting how many seconds she would be exposed to the monsters.)

I don't quite understand the main character's name though,

Als?

How do you pronounce that?

Well, I liked the story, and I'll put you on my authors to watch list or whatever it is.

Looking forward to a continuation of this story, or other, future stories.

A.Z. (Alex) Anthony

Hey,

That was pretty...cute. Not sure what other adjective to give it ]. Is this supposed to be a one-shot or a longer story? It seems fine the way it is but u could definetely make it into something longer as well. I liked the realistic thought process of a young child (which I assume Als was-did her age ever get mentioned?) and I could totally imagine this being a published children's book. Anyways, good stuff, w/ nothing really big to crit on.

Btw, I was looking at your profile and I just wanted to mention I LOVE "Song of Ice and Fire" by Martin.

See ya!